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-I'm Eryn. My pronouns are [she/her][p]. This is my personal page. Welcome!
-
-I'm a queer trans woman. I live in San Francisco, CA, on the unceded ancestral
-lands of the Ramaytush Ohlone people, with my [two cats][cats]. I was born in
-Seattle, WA and grew up in Phoenix, AZ. I attended [Oberlin College][ob] where I
-got a degree in Computer Science. {{< tess >}} is my girlfriend.
+I'm Eryn. My pronouns are [she/her][p]. I'm a queer trans woman. I live in San
+Francisco, CA, on the unceded ancestral lands of the Ramaytush Ohlone people,
+with my [two cats][cats]. I was born in Seattle, WA and grew up in Phoenix, AZ.
+I attended [Oberlin College][ob] where I got a degree in Computer Science.
+{{< tess >}} is my girlfriend.
 
 I speak English natively, and Spanish too, though I always need more practice.
 
 ## Hobbies
 
-I have a big appetite for learning new skills, especially things that combine
-multiple of my interests.
-
 I've been a musician for most of my life. I started on the piano at age seven,
 played trumpet in high school, and have picked up a smattering of other
 instruments along the way. I still play piano occasionally, but my current